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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 5:54:07 PM
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land-e-scape
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ok i wrote this almost three years ago and ended up hating the ending, so i just revised it, and now i like it :P
The Rainbow
God paints a picture for all to see
In the dew on the grass or the leaves of a tree
Tiny prisms that fall from the sky
Brilliant lights that sparkle to catch your eye
When a storm passes into twilight's soft glow
And leaves behind a beautiful, vibrant rainbow
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 7:55:27 PM
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 Somewhere... over the rainbow...
*ahem* oh, sorry.
That was good.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 8:27:26 PM
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land-e-scape
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thank you :)
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 9:08:28 PM
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That was very pretty, land-e-scape. I like your use of imagery.
I've been contemplating putting up some poems I've written recently. I just dunno, people might think I'm weird....
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 9:09:03 PM
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Rae.
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DO IT!
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 9:09:06 PM
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If you post one I'll post one.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 9:10:48 PM
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land-e-scape
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ORIGINAL: rae_of_light
That was very pretty, land-e-scape. I like your use of imagery.
I've been contemplating putting up some poems I've written recently. I just dunno, people might think I'm weird....
thank you! :))
and don't worry about people thinking you're weird, because most likely they are too lol
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 9:11:52 PM
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ORIGINAL: land-e-scape
thank you! :))
and don't worry about people thinking you're weird, because most likely they are too lol
Believe me. They are.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 9:18:41 PM
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Hehehe, too true, too true. Maybe I will post one or two... I'll hafta type them out first though.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 10:05:32 PM
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trust me you, I've already posted the worst poetry here(in a previous share thread) so that no one else could ever be embarrassed.
so POST!
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 10:14:44 PM
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Okay, I'm gonna do it. It very flawed, I know. It has no rhyme to it or anything, it was just how the words appeared in my head after an experience that I had a couple weeks ago. The second one... I think I messed something up with the meter, I thought I was doing it right, but now that I look at it again, it's ALL WRONG. The type of poem I wrote, a quatrain, can have a couple rhyme schemes. The one I did was like abcb, but I did it backwards! Ick... So here's the one that doesn't rhyme.
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Praise
A hundred eyes
cold
empty
They are watching
Waiting for me to
fall
fail
A thousand lips
vain
false
They are speaking
Telling me
lies
platitudes
Their words come
unfeeling
insincere
They feel validated
Their good deed done
prideful
arrogant
There I stand
weak
unsure
Their words swirling
Driving me to despair
I am broken.
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So there it is, told ya it was weird!
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 10:16:50 PM
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land-e-scape
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it's not wierd it's....contemplative
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 10:16:58 PM
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it's heartfelt, not a plastic mold. I like it, Rea.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 10:31:08 PM
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That was a heck of a poem.
I said if you posted a poem, I would, but I'm too tired to think of one, so I'll do it tommorrow.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 10:44:55 PM
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That was entirely atrocious, Rae. Seriously, why do you even bother? You used way too many T's.
It's not as bad as you proclaim. Stop being so hard on yourself.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 11:21:35 PM
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This is about a second chance that's offered to all of us. Depending on whether we open up and let life take it's course in us.
A stranger graced Himself upon my doorstep,
Ripped and ragged clothing, with a stain from where He had wept.
His finger pressed upon the doorbell while the echo fills the hollow home,
Waiting patiently, wondering where they may have roamed.
Hair brushed over his pretty blue eyes, with palms filled up with sweat,
"Am I wasting My time?", is the thought that comes with regret.
I look outside my window filled with dust and dirt,
I gaze at Him from a distance and think, "what has He to offer me that is of worth?"
Tracing back into the corners of my dark and thoughtless mind,
I hear the doorbell ring for one very last time.
Standing still with no emotion or clue of what to do,
He was still outside with life while I was due to be renewed.
While hope lingers on the rotation of a doorknob,
Oh, what to do, what to do?
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 11:23:05 PM
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fabius
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W. O. W.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/4/2008 11:26:47 PM
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Dang, Randy.
You never cease to amaze me.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/5/2008 8:43:13 AM
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That was beautiful Randy. I liked yours too Rae! At least you had the courage to post it.
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RE: Share what you've written - 4/6/2008 8:22:14 AM
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Watch out they'll swallow you whole and steal your purity. They'll take and hurt you and cut you. Watch out Kat don't forget who you are, you are loved. So don't try and fill that heart heart shaped hole with things that don't fit. be careful Kat they'll do what they can to turn you against your friends.
it is supposed to be lyrics to a song but i am not done with it yet !! so what do ya'll think about it??
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dont you dare. should i write it here? let me know what you think.
