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RE: Share what you've written - 12/12/2005 3:11:42 PM
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whisper
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Let Go
You hold to your unique heartache
as if it is a badge of honour
and you scream in the middle of an empty street
"I am not the same for she is gone!"
Well, your voice resonates
and your response:
pidgeons shift their position
fluttering away to a safer spot
further along the wire.
nov 3 2005
Strange Soul
Your beautiful soul is
quaint, strange,
handsome-
Recondite and rousing every part of me
to delve into your mystery.
Oh that I would pose a similar enticement!
If you should propose to know my inmost self
I hope the findings
would prove no less splendid and satisfying
than what you had hoped to uncover.
nov 29, 2005
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/15/2005 6:47:03 AM
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Sirach
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ORIGINAL: greenish
Jill, I will miss yours too.
I promise, someday we'll exchange anthologies. 
You must go? But I like seeing your poetry... :( Even poetry can't express words of parting. :| Have a good life now, and do visit!
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/15/2005 11:38:26 AM
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dreamonliving
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Hi well I have a question on the grading scale for school it's A-B-C-D-F where is the E?
I also have a poem here it goes:
A QUESTION ON MY MIND
What is beauty without a shattered mirror,
What is trust without a lie,
What is falling without a jump,
What is a crush without a broken heart,
What is happiness without hurtfulness,
What is breathing without air,
What is life without you.
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/15/2005 9:21:59 PM
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Talia
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ORIGINAL: inlovewithshadowfax
I rarely post poems on here, so I don't know why I'm posting this one. Here goes nothing.
Incapable
Is my heart of stone
Endless excuses
Pile behind me
Reasons why you can’t be real
With those three little words
You ceaselessly haunt me
Until in desperation
My heart cries
“Meaningless!”
And shuts you out
Yet it longs to think
To believe
That just possibly
This could be
Might be
True
But no
My twisted logic
Will ever reign
I really do like this one faxy.
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To see the world in a grain of sand, and a heaven in a wild flower, Holds infinity in the palm of your hand, and eternity in an hour. - William Blake
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/15/2005 9:24:14 PM
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Talia
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Here's the most recent one I wrote.
Free
You were the one I longed to held
My arms encircling, holding
Reaching, needing you
Imagining you were here.
How long I suffered
My heart aching for you
I guess you did too
Pining for me as I did for you
Lost in a world
Created by two
Drowsy with love
Numb with pain
Wanting to stay true
But now I’m free
Awakened now
Facing reality
No longer bound
No longer enslaved
By emotions past
Freed by the truth
That the reality of you
I do not love.
Know now that’s true
The man you were
The man you could have been
Held my heart captive
The man you are now
Has no hold over me
Your weakness,
Your failure,
Your Loss.
I’m now forever free.
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so.in.awe
To see the world in a grain of sand, and a heaven in a wild flower, Holds infinity in the palm of your hand, and eternity in an hour. - William Blake
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/15/2005 10:15:34 PM
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Silverflame180
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I didn't get to read everything yet, but so far I've seen a lot of talented pplz :0) Here's a little o' mine. The first I posted in writers round table before and the second one I havent edited yet, but all I got time to post right now, lol.
The Rose
O soft and proud rose, my beautiful flower,
I’ve created you, you are mine.
In my sight you are perfect and beautiful still
Though your thorns so remain unrefined
Though you’ve cut yourself now from the branch I’ve supplied,
To bind each rose closely together
Caught up on the wind of a foreign kind,
You are carried to lands unfamiliar
Did you not find it grand to be caught by the wind?
Swept on the current of your will
Spinning and turning to uncertainly so,
On what once seemed a plan of your own
But now the wind’s ceased, leaving only the truth
You fall to the dust of the earth
Kicked and trampled, you are battered and torn
You know not now how to turn
My beloved rose, I know you still
Even as you turn and sway
I was with you when you seemed far from me,
Ever calling you back to your home
Your petals so frail and easily bruised;
Your true strength I placed within
For when you were broken, your dry petals crushed,
Is when the sweet scent of God filled the air
Crimson petals washed, by heaven’s tears
Dust covered once, I cleansed you
Uncertain, alone in the cold, dry earth
Once lost, it is I who found you
Crushed and trampled beneath ignorant feet
Broken, I restore you
Your frail form torn beyond repair
My sweet crimson rose, I make you new
Simply This
I asked God to know the reason.
He said, “Ask not ‘Why’, but ‘Am I willing?’”
I asked God, “How can I change?”
He answered, “By not trying to.”
I asked God for peace.
He said, “Through faith you will gain peace.”
I asked God for faith.
He replied, “First, you must learn trust.”
I asked God to see the truth.
He whispered, “Keep your eyes always on me.”
I questioned why we must know pain.
He answered, “That you might understand compassion.”
I asked, “What is it to know true love?”
He said, “Simply this: to know me.”
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/15/2005 11:15:03 PM
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whisper
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Just Ressurrected- I love "free"... that feeling is something that I have known.
Silverflame- you're very talented.
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/16/2005 11:37:41 AM
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Silverflame180
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Thanks pplz :0) There's a lot of amazing talent here. sirach and whisper especially stand out- You guys are amazing poets. Keep it up. :0) I still haven't gotten to finish reading everything though, lol. But keep it up, ppl. You all rock. :0)
Here's a pretty new poem (so new, it doesnt even have a name, lol) and then a couple old ones.... I posted a couple of these somewhere here before too... Sadly, I dont have much of my poetry saved on this comp, but this'll have to do for now.... Sorry, the second and third one are kinda sad, just to warn you, hehe
It was sung once, in the ancient song sung by the winds,
That even in darkness You surround me
It was spoken once, in sunsets of colored lights,
That Your love endures forever
I once heard it whispered in a stream,
That You mend the broken-hearted
That there is no darkness deep enough,
to keep me hidden from You
Upholder of the mountains,
Composer of the mourn
Is Your love still unchanging?
Still enough to mend the broken?
They say You break all chains
And how I long to be free
They say You cleanse all shame
And how I wish for joy
Maker of the heavens,
I long for Your embrace
Keeper of the stars,
I look to You, my God
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Tears
And so you wept, your tears of acid
Tears of anger, tears of pain
And you did speak, your words like winter
Frosted words from a frozen heart
Tears from my soul, slip to the ground
And the soul, it never lies
Your eyes tell the tale of unavenged pain
Tell me, is that how you died?
My glass heart shatters, beneath yours of stone
How can you stay so cold?
Is there life behind your numb expression?
Does it hurt to be alone?
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So This is Pain
You've been gone so long.
Is this goodbye?
You've faded so far.
Have I come too late?
Eyes once shining with mirth
Are now but dim hollows of lifeless stone
Where laughter rang
An empty silence has gained triumph
Who is this stranger that stands before me now;
With a haunting resemblance of one I once loved?
I swear I've ne're known you before
But behind those dying embers I'll catch a glimpse of her.
Is it that your soul is slowly dying?
Or has your mask simply faded with wear?
I thought I knew you.
I thought I knew...
In my heart it's as though you've died.
Left so sudden with no farewell.
How my heart aches for your pain and your passing.
Here I will watch and wait for you, as I pray for your return.
Though I know this shall ne're be.
So this is how the plot unfolds.
One story ends, the book is closed.
I love you, goodbye.
I love you, goodbye...
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On Fate and Choices
So calm this night, so silent, so still.
You know in your heart it’s like no night yet passed.
So deep the silence, so ominous and queer
That the sound of each thought echoes back like thunder.
This is the time, that has never yet been.
This is the chance, that will never come again.
This is the moment, the instant where fate,
Teeters on the edge of illusion.
Which way will it fall? Which way will you choose?
Will you take the stand? Or let rest in fate’s hands?
Which way will it fall, or which way will you choose?
Who defines the line between fact and illusion?
This is the time, that has never yet been.
This is the chance, that will never come again.
This is the moment, the instant where fate,
Teeters on the edge of illusion.
Will you let it fall to nothingness,
Or catch it before it hit’s dry earth?
Will you let brake what is meant to be broken?
Leave unsaid what was meant to spoken?
Do you hold steady thought and an open heart?
And can you tell apart the two?
Are you strong enough to catch yourself?
To love and say goodbye?
Which way will it fall? Which way will you choose?
Will you take the stand? Or let rest in fate’s hands?
Which way will it fall, or which way will you choose?
Who defines the line between fact and illusion?
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/20/2005 10:46:24 PM
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Talia
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Silverflame180, all I can say is wow, they are amazing.
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To see the world in a grain of sand, and a heaven in a wild flower, Holds infinity in the palm of your hand, and eternity in an hour. - William Blake
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/22/2005 9:55:00 PM
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Silverflame180
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Thnx Just_ressurected :0) I love your poem "Free" also
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/23/2005 1:51:59 AM
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inlovewithshadowfax
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Silverflame- I've said it before in Writer's Roundtable, and I'll say it again. You are an amazing poet. I really like your work.
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And I'm still fighting for the word
To break these chains
Can I still pray when I look in your eyes
Stare right back down
Into something beautiful
~"Something Beautiful"- Jars of Clay~
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/24/2005 12:40:22 PM
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kaoru
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oh i like those silverfalme can i paste those on my comp those are so good in fact can i just have any of these i love um all!!
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/25/2005 9:03:06 PM
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Silverflame180
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Haha, sure, you can borrow them if you'd like, kaoru :0)
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/25/2005 9:06:23 PM
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Sirach
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ORIGINAL: Silverflame180
Haha, sure, you can borrow them if you'd like, kaoru :0)
You're a wonderful poet for a free-stylist. Keep up the wonderful work... I just browsed your above works, and they're quite beautiful! ^__^
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/25/2005 9:55:20 PM
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Silverflame180
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Here's one called "The Dance" that I wrote back in March. I haven't really shared it with anyone yet 'cause I'm not even completely sure I like it. So it's just kinda been sitting for awhile. I guess it's kinda s'pose to be God speak, but it could also be froma person who's already passed on....or something. Some parts seem a lil sappy to me, but lemme know what you think, hehe.
The second I guess is *kinda* a free-verse....thing. I'm not really sure what it is yet. I just now jotted it down, so no editing has taken place yet, but it's christmassy...kinda. So yeah....
The Dance
Dance your way through, your music is life
Each song tells a story, both dismal and light
Some may dance with you, joining in on your song
But when you dance alone, may your steps remain strong
Dance through the meadows of green and blue-gray
Dance through the night time and into the day
The sun now is rising. Her gold rays are warm
Dance from the darkness, dance with the morn.
Dance beneath shadows, dance through the storm
When the music notes thunder and turn into noise
Though the scenery shifts and collapses like sand
Dance through the rain clouds, dance to dry land
Dance through the sorrows, when all else seems still
When the music grows softer and harder to hear
The melody’s slow now, each movement so slight
Though each step uncertain, on you shall glide
Dance now with laughter, all heart and all soul
The rivers rejoice with fresh praises and songs
The colors are vibrant, the melody swift
Dance now with laughter, dance now with bliss
Dance just once more, this song’s brilliant and free
Paint gold satin sunsets with silvery gray
It’s the song that plays on, passed eternity
Savor each step and save the last dance for me
Silent Night
Even when You first tried to enter this world,
Where ever You turned, they turned you away
“No room,” they said, “No room for such things.”
Didn’t they know that they turned away their king?
You spoke of love in the city streets;
Healed the blind, the deaf, the lame, and the broken
You gave all to us so undeserving- always giving, never taking
What a shame we humans never comprehend- Always taking never giving
This is the love we preach on our own street corners.
“No room!” we cried. “No room for such things!”
As we nailed true love to a rugged tree.
But didn’t we know, we’d just killed our own king?
Two-thousand years later, still we turn away blindly
Letting our Christmas lights outshine our true king.
Santa Claus and holidays gifts, but “God” is not to be spoken of
We’d rather offend the heart of God than the thoughts of the man down the street
“No room,” we say. “No room for such names.”
Change makes us uneasy; best not to offend.
“No room!” we cry. “No place for a king!”
Kingless and lawless, we’d rather walk blind.
There ya go. If people like them, maybe I'll actually finish editing them, lol.
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/25/2005 11:11:38 PM
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christiangirl0920
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wow! that was awesome. it was sooo true! i don't really know how to format a poem, so i'll just type it in a paragraph.
Skate Rush
the hug of the curve, the sound of the wheels, spinning and spinning, the uncontrollable feel. the feeling of rush down the back of your spine. this feeling that makes your fingers entertwine. it's fun and it's free this sport is to me. still in the process of learning new tricks, crash landing them is something i'll have to fix. even though i'm not the best, i'll always have fun in this heart-racing skateboard fest.
so how was it? did it sound okay?
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/26/2005 3:06:34 PM
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kaoru
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Ash,I wanna here more about Ryu
wow every body here is so great at this poetry thang i ain't all that good at poetry but i do like writin story's
Tales of a Wandering Samuria~
The night sky was black and beautiful stars dotted the sky. It was a warm spring night and Kenshin thought that nothing could be more perfect than those beautiful stars. His heart wandered on far and true. Searching for the truth, his soul yearned for peace. For now he would repent for his sins as best he could for now, in the only way he knew to. He would keep going and delight in the sight of pink cherry blossoms against a blue sky, he would taste the sweet water that gurgled out of springs in the forest, and he would smell the beautiful fragrance of a white plum…and remember. He looked up into the black night sky with the sparkling stars against it, he breathed deeply, in such a way that he could almost feel the magic of the moment sinking into every part of his being.
“Hitokiri Battosia!”
He turned to the voice, his hand ready on the hilt of his sword. But he was surprised at who the intruder was. It was a girl.
Her hair was pulled up on her head into a tail and bangs fell just above her fierce blue eyes. She stood, two paces between the two of them, holding a boken in her right hand.
Kenshin was very surprised but most of all he wandered how she knew him.
“I’ve found you.” her voice quavered as if she were trying to hold something back. She flared her boken out so fast that a hissing noise whizzed through the air. She stood in a stance that he recognized. “For two months you have murdered at will! Now it ends!” Furry flared from her eyes and anger rang in her voice.
“Oro?” he muttered, wide-eyed in his confusion. Murders! What murders!?
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/27/2005 3:41:23 AM
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inlovewithshadowfax
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I was going through my poetry last night and discovered a poem I wrote in early November that I actually sort of like. I mostly just like it because of the meter, but I'll post it. The second poem is one I wrote last night.
You're so busy
With your hectic life
I can understand
Why you've been gone
Yet part of me
Dearly misses you,
Asks if things ever
Will be the same.
So if you somehow find time
Remember to think of me.
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Run away.
Hide from the pain.
Flee when things hurt.
Listen to bittersweet lies.
Ignore the heartache.
Escape love.
Run away.
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And I'm still fighting for the word
To break these chains
Can I still pray when I look in your eyes
Stare right back down
Into something beautiful
~"Something Beautiful"- Jars of Clay~
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